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whooff

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ρσιηтℓєѕѕ ѕтσяу

m not a good poet as i always say to others. :) yet i love to try things.. :yes:

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twisted

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    it rather appeared pointless...and it really made no sense.

    you don't have to try so hard for it to rhyme..just have a meaning that would paint us a picture and simple lines would do...

    praise you for trying and keep writing..good luck.
     

    whooff

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    Nice one Bro :) :D

    Thnx macho :)


    Thnx dude :)

    it rather appeared pointless...and it really made no sense.

    you don't have to try so hard for it to rhyme..just have a meaning that would paint us a picture and simple lines would do...

    praise you for trying and keep writing..good luck.

    appreciate ur comments brother.. yeah it's totally pointless..but it has a meaning behind it.. read it twice or thrice then u'll get it.. :) i dint try to rhyme it so hardly it just i wanted it that way...
    thnx alot for the encouragement :)
     

    pantaloon

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    poem contains smkind of a rythm, love that rythm.
    the style is different
    novelty z there
    theme is different
    try to write more,cz u hav a gud style, ur style cn derive the reader into new volitions