I watched this video and it was like a trip down the memory lane.
Just a few tips.
Video quality was fairly low even when played at 1080p at 60 FPS (I am using a 2k monitor 2560x1440). Try to improve that. Maybe record in 4k.

Try to use a bit more stable camera or a tripod.
There were subtitles saying "We are going through a tunnel" even though there was no tunnel for miles from that place. Try fix this kind of stuff and grammar in general. Good luck!