My Dream is............

[LAPD]

Edited coz of the mistakes in the first poem

 

[rudayas]

nys

 

[ishanthidi]

hmm...u told u need a criticism...he he...so i will begin like this....As a whole i can analyze this poem as a great literacy work of modern time....i think ur rhyming scheme suits the poem in a wonderful manner.....many rhyming couplets are seen which give an excellent sound imagery.....the words sometimes, somehow etc has the repetition of sibilant sounds.....as well as i can clearly see the visual imagery in this poem......So together with all these techniques this poem can be knows as an excellent work.....so good luck dear


BHO HA HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

PS: I KNOW U WILL NEVER ASK ME TO COMMENT ON UR WORKS ANYMORE

 

[Nash']

woah! nyc mate! NICE!

well said... "realities are born of dreams"..
nyccc!! i luv dat line...
dere's a cupl f grammar errors....n sm lines dnt make sense...
but all n all JUST WONDERFUL!!

keep up da gud wrk bro!

 

[Angel_Senuri]

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lovely poem n d image is sooooo matching!!!


Great malliya!!!!!!

 

[LAPD]

nys

thx mate

 

[NTuffey]

Lassana poem 1 LAPD.....

 

[LAPD]

hmm...u told u need a criticism...he he...so i will begin like this....As a whole i can analyze this poem as a great literacy work of modern time....i think ur rhyming scheme suits the poem in a wonderful manner.....many rhyming couplets are seen which give an excellent sound imagery.....the words sometimes, somehow etc has the repetition of sibilant sounds.....as well as i can clearly see the visual imagery in this poem......So together with all these techniques this poem can be knows as an excellent work.....so good luck dear


BHO HA HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

PS: I KNOW U WILL NEVER ASK ME TO COMMENT ON UR WORKS ANYMORE

oh god, thx for ur loooooooooooooooooog comment sweetheart, lolz

 

[LAPD]

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Lovely poem n d image is sooooo matching!!!


Great malliya!!!!!!

thx akki

 

[LAPD]

woah! nyc mate! NICE!

well said... "realities are born of dreams"..
nyccc!! i luv dat line...
dere's a cupl f grammar errors....n sm lines dnt make sense...
but all n all JUST WONDERFUL!!

keep up da gud wrk bro!

grammer errors? oh, dnt mind them, its poetic license, lolz, anyway thx

 

[nad253]

hmmm nice one bro... keep writing

good ps work as well

 

[LAPD]

Lassana poem 1 LAPD.....

thx sis

 

[LAPD]

hmmm nice one bro... keep writing

good ps work as well

thx bro

 

[Nash']

grammer errors? oh, dnt ind them, its poetic license, lolz, anyway thx

hehe truu...
i didn't mean to find SOME fault of ur excelent piece o" work...
ws jz tryna u knww point out smthn rong i see for u to develop ur skills...as me myslf am not a great poet...
actually am not a poet at all...
so u see...ws jz tryna point out smthn i see....instead f jz goin "NICE...GREAT" lyk evry1 duzz...

cheers mate!

 

[LAPD]

hehe truu...
i didn't mean to find SOME fault of ur excelent piece o" work...
ws jz tryna u knww point out smthn rong i see for u to develop ur skills...as me myslf am not a great poet...
actually am not a poet at all...
so u see...ws jz tryna point out smthn i see....instead f jz goin "NICE...GREAT" lyk evry1 duzz...

cheers mate!

its ok bro, i gt ya, i dint mind that at all bro thx fir pointin out them, and also for u comment

cheers

 

[Elysium]

Really a nice poem bro
this poem is lovable than ur other poems& suits 4 a song also

 

[LAPD]

Really a nice poem bro
this poem is lovable than ur other poems& suits 4 a song also

thx for ur appreciation bro

 

[Elysium]

thx for ur appreciation bro

lol nope sis

 

[LAPD]

lol nope sis

oh sorry sis, i didn't noticed that, anyway i edited my poem coz of the mistakes

 

[HimaliL]

My dream

Beautiful work
May all your dreams come true!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!