The promise of the night

twisted

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    The promise of the night


    Peak over the clouds, rays and hues,
    thru the morning breeze
    the ripple of the rivers and seas

    simulated azure, devoid of cloud white
    overwhelmingly blue
    burns just a shade too bright..

    ..For my eyes, my ears
    happy birds filling with chirp
    yet, I still leer..

    ..at the reflecting rivers, reflecting seas
    ,bathing grass blades..
    I do miss the shade

    Angry childs drifting tears, fake cheers
    I prick up my ears
    to the drone of the twilight..

    ..making way for her to come
    her musical hum, my hearts strum
    and the promise of the night

    I welcome her, draping dark cloth
    , covering me with glory and grace
    not with after taste of the day

    I lie content,
    neither asleep nor awake
    basking in the love we make :love::love:

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    yakshaya

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    not rich enough to review this but,

    "I lie content,
    neither asleep nor awake
    basking in the love we make"

    can say its another good work of art.
     

    twisted

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    පට්ටය...:cool:

    thank you :yes:

    nice one bro! ;):)

    thanks :P:love:

    not rich enough to review this but,

    "I lie content,
    neither asleep nor awake
    basking in the love we make"

    can say its another good work of art.

    think of what you get done when you are at office :P

    And I would hate anybody rich as in lit to review this cos those critical bastard can be merciless and to be true, this is a work of an amateur :P


    පට්ට මචං රේප් ++

    Thanks bro, I wanna try and write a sinhala version of this :)
     

    djiresh

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    Unbelievably and undeniably brilliant. I enjoyed it and was beautifully written. :yes::yes::love::love::love:
    One comment if I may. :):)


    simulated azure devoid of cloud white
    overwhelmingly blue
    burns just a shade too bright..

    Just felt bit rough comparing with other smoothing words you have used. May be something like “Aura”
     
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    twisted

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    Unbelievably and undeniably brilliant. I enjoyed it and was beautifully written. :yes::yes::love::love::love:
    One comment if I may. :):)


    simulated azure devoid of cloud white
    overwhelmingly blue
    burns just a shade too bright..

    Just felt bit rough comparing with other smoothing words you have used. May be something like “Aura”

    Thanks for the lovely comment :):)

    I did want to keep it simple from the start lol must have gotten carried away in the process.
     

    twisted

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    :love:
    are you ok?
    සුපිරියි.. අවංකවම..

    I'm pretty good :P and thanks lots :love:

    I welcome her, draping dark cloth
    , covering me with glory and grace


    :P

    kuppa smilie eka saho :P

    අංගුලිමාල;18274996 said:
    you'd love ernest dawson's cinarae (if you haven't already read it) :P

    I had not read it before, I just did and fell instantly in love with it :love: thanks a bunch

    Last night, ah, yesternight, betwixt her lips and mine
    There fell thy shadow, Cynara! Thy breath was shed
     

    twisted

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    අංගුලිමාල;18275098 said:
    "I have been faithful to thee, Cynara! in my fashion." a universal excuse:P

    Anyway you'd love to read about why he wrote this poem too :D

    I've been faithful, in my own way? :rofl: that never works though.

    I read that poem 3 times already and first it looked like the guy is cheating, but I think it's about trying to let go of a past that is stronger than present and the future with no success :P beautiful shit though.

    have to read reviews to get the real meaning I suppose..

    so why'd he write it?
     
    I've been faithful, in my own way? :rofl: that never works though.

    I read that poem 3 times already and first it looked like the guy is cheating, but I think it's about trying to let go of a past that is stronger than present and the future with no success :P beautiful shit though.

    have to read reviews to get the real meaning I suppose..

    so why'd he write it?

    to borrow from the poet himself "i have forgot much twisted, gone with the years"
    he loved a girl who was much younger, and was declined. he took up drinking and wasted himself.
    just like you said he saw cinarae(his crush, not the real name) in every woman he slept with, but couldnt get over it.
    "trying to let go of a past that is stronger than present and the future with no success" you nailed it.
     

    twisted

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    අංගුලිමාල;18275147 said:
    to borrow from the poet himself "i have forgot much twisted, gone with the years"
    he loved a girl who was much younger, and was declined. he took up drinking and wasted himself.
    just like you said he saw cinarae(his crush, not the real name) in every woman he slept with, but couldnt get over it.
    "trying to let go of a past that is stronger than present and the future with no success" you nailed it.

    looks to me like he partied hard :P unrequited love has through out centuries paved the way for some serious work of art :yes::yes:

    Thanks, I'm going to dig this guys poems.

    This poem of mine has no similar meaning though :D