Darling, will you be my love?

[OptiplexFx]

This is my first attempt at writing a poem, So here it goes :

Let me know what you think....
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[chriela]

Wow.....Great creation brother.....well done!!!! Keep writing......

 

[OptiplexFx]

Wow.....Great creation brother.....well done!!!! Keep writing......

Thanks

 

[j2l]

Bravo ..... friend ! .... keep writing ..... U are on the go

 

[rudayas]

nice

 

[OptiplexFx]

Bravo ..... friend ! .... keep writing ..... U are on the go

nice

 

[||~R_girl~||]

ONLY if u can do al thos 4 her, she cud be ur love??

nywy simple n nyc poem!
gud attempt na very gud start!!!
way to go!

 

[OptiplexFx]

ONLY if u can do al thos 4 her, she cud be ur love??

hmm.. I guess that is what I'm asking..
I was thinking of a way to improve that last sentence, but couldn't really come with a better way.
Still getting the hang of it.. I mean I've never written anything like this before..

nywy simple n nyc poem!
gud attempt na very gud start!!!
way to go!

thanks,

 

[Myth]

is this really the first time. . . . . . wow

 

[||~R_girl~||]

hmm.. I guess that is what I'm asking..
I was thinking of a way to improve that last sentence, but couldn't really come with a better way.
Still getting the hang of it.. I mean I've never written anything like this before..



thanks,

Hope she'l accpt! hehe

yh dts y i sed its a great start
kp em cmin!

 

[OptiplexFx]

is this really the first time. . . . . . wow

Yes it is...

Hope she'l accpt! hehe

yh dts y i sed its a great start
kp em cmin!

Sure..

 

[nmps]

Wow GR8 MCN
Keep it up!!!!

 

[Ashawari]

heeheeee u told me u cant write poems, but u hav written.
ny way ,simple & nice creations. gud luck

 

[Doly]

Nice creation with nice wording
keep going aiye

 

[OptiplexFx]

heeheeee u told me u cant write poems, but u hav written.
ny way ,simple & nice creations. gud luck

Nice creation with nice wording
keep going aiye

Thanks for all the encouraging comments..