~ My first poem ~

m3pium

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    Realy nice poem bro.
    Some peoples drive their life as uncontrollable.....Mainly for money.. They think also love can buy.....But..when they understand it can't.....too late...:(Even they haven't to time feel, how cold the wind......
    Keep up ur talent Bro.:)
    All the best!!!!

     

    Hayao

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    ♪ p1ɹoʍ uʍo ʎɯ uı ♥♫
    හොඳ නිර්මාණයක් යාළුවා... දිගටම ලියමු... සුබ පතනව ඔබට... :)

    Thanks aiya! :)

    Realy nice poem bro.
    Some peoples drive their life as uncontrollable.....Mainly for money.. They think also love can buy.....But..when they understand it can't.....too late...:(Even they haven't to time feel, how cold the wind......
    Keep up ur talent Bro.:)
    All the best!!!!


    Yes that is why i hate modern life. In past our parents lived very happily but now everything has changed.:(

    Thanks a lot for your comment friend. :):)

    very nice and will wish you a good future in EK poems forum. keep it up all the best

    Thanks a lot friend!! :):)
     
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    Yes that is why i hate modern life. In past our parents lived very happily but now everything has changed.:(

    ur sense about life is gr8 bro....keep it up!! wish u good luck!!!:)
     

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    ජීවත්වෙන්න බලු රේස් එකක දුවමින් සිටිනා අපේ මිනිස්සු ඒ තත්වයට පත් කරපු ධනේශ්වර සමාජ ක්‍රමයයි මෙහි විශාලම වග උත්තරකරු...

    ඔබේ පලමු නිර්මානයෙන්ම ඔබ පත්තු කොට තිබෙන වෙඩි මුරය ඔබේ ඉදිරි ගමන් මග ගැන හොඳ පැහැදිලි බලාපොරොත්තුවක් අප සිත් තුල වඩවා ඇත.

    කුසලතාවය ඇති ඔබට දිගටම ලියන්න කියල මං ආරාධනා කරනවා...

    මල්ලිට/නංගිට ජය...
     

    Hayao

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    wardak nehneee good

    Thanks bro!! :)

    ජීවත්වෙන්න බලු රේස් එකක දුවමින් සිටිනා අපේ මිනිස්සු ඒ තත්වයට පත් කරපු ධනේශ්වර සමාජ ක්‍රමයයි මෙහි විශාලම වග උත්තරකරු...

    ඔබේ පලමු නිර්මානයෙන්ම ඔබ පත්තු කොට තිබෙන වෙඩි මුරය ඔබේ ඉදිරි ගමන් මග ගැන හොඳ පැහැදිලි බලාපොරොත්තුවක් අප සිත් තුල වඩවා ඇත.

    කුසලතාවය ඇති ඔබට දිගටම ලියන්න කියල මං ආරාධනා කරනවා...

    මල්ලිට/නංගිට ජය...

    Thanks a lot for your comment brother. :) BTW i am bro. :)

    idea is just great machan but you have to work on lines and rythm ..keep writing you will defa get better good luck.

    Yeah bro i didn't think about that very much. Next time i try to do so. :)

    Thanks for da advice bro. :)
     

    Shan D

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    meanin akak tiyana akak bro bt machn meka poems wala tiyana Techniqs madi.. anika maeka english poem akak nisa poem techniqs gena hithanna one..oyage 1st poem aka nisai mehema kiyanne n oyata tawa improve kara ganna one... bro mama o/l walata english Lit kala cz poemz gena tikak hodata dannawa.. oyata ikmanata oyage skills improv kara ganna puluwan wei...
    gud luk bro :)
     

    Hayao

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    meanin akak tiyana akak bro bt machn meka poems wala tiyana Techniqs madi.. anika maeka english poem akak nisa poem techniqs gena hithanna one..oyage 1st poem aka nisai mehema kiyanne n oyata tawa improve kara ganna one... bro mama o/l walata english Lit kala cz poemz gena tikak hodata dannawa.. oyata ikmanata oyage skills improv kara ganna puluwan wei...
    gud luk bro :)

    Yes bro mama mekata rhymes use kare ne. Hithatha apu eka liwwa.

    Next time mama rhymes use karanna one.:yes:

    Thanks bro for you advice. :)
     

    Shan D

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    Yes bro mama mekata rhymes use kare ne. Hithatha apu eka liwwa.

    Next time mama rhymes use karanna one.:yes:

    Thanks bro for you advice. :)

    mmm... rhymes walata wada thawa technics tiyanawa machn.. awa machn simple technics n awa use kalama poem aka godak lassana wenawa... mata dan awa mathaka nam nehe:(... google karala poem technics stdy karanna bro.. :):) n english poems tikak serch karala balanna.. mara interrstin machn:)
     

    Hayao

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    mmm... rhymes walata wada thawa technics tiyanawa machn.. awa machn simple technics n awa use kalama poem aka godak lassana wenawa... mata dan awa mathaka nam nehe:(... google karala poem technics stdy karanna bro.. :):) n english poems tikak serch karala balanna.. mara interrstin machn:)

    Okay bro mama ehema karannam. :) Ow english poem godak lassana ewa tiyenawa. Mama search karala balannam. Thanks a lot for your help bro. :)