under the rain

aye_sha90

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UNDER THE RAIN

It is ranin again
n people are walkin around me without any pain
what is the meaning of this nonsens rain?
does anyone knw wht is its name?
people come n go
without stopping n saying hello
But everyone has got a story
everyone hides that in the memory
everyone has a name
everyone has its pain
under this dark and hard rain
I'm always trying to understand their minds
but i have never found in them any signs
they walk and walk
wracked by this darkness, they can not stop
because the agony can not be cleaned with a soap
and the fear is too polluted to be moped
they are illuded opening their eyes
because they can not see the real light
the darkness is summit in their mind
but their soul cant be forever blind!



AYESHA
 

Nash'

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ummm.....nice...but u knw too heavy as in...it jz washes out da simplicity and the cuteness of a poem...
buh dere's such a category of poems too dat have explicit and hard to get meanings...
so if u tried that...den itz a really kewl one...as in lyk super kewl...
and i av ta say...i dint get da meanin evn.... :lol: dere! i was honest.... :lol:
ummm....and u were too concentrated on rhyming it seems...cz den n dre u av made a few grammar errors....not a big deal though...
all n all wunnerful poem....kewl stf...keep up rytn...
and err....jz a suggestion...try to...lyk giv a lil clu here n dre or n da end f da poem...as n wat u r tryna say or wat u r tokn abt...
cheers! :)
 

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Nash' said:
ummm.....nice...but u knw too heavy as in...it jz washes out da simplicity and the cuteness of a poem...
buh dere's such a category of poems too dat have explicit and hard to get meanings...
so if u tried that...den itz a really kewl one...as in lyk super kewl...
and i av ta say...i dint get da meanin evn.... :lol: dere! i was honest.... :lol:
ummm....and u were too concentrated on rhyming it seems...cz den n dre u av made a few grammar errors....not a big deal though...
all n all wunnerful poem....kewl stf...keep up rytn...
and err....jz a suggestion...try to...lyk giv a lil clu here n dre or n da end f da poem...as n wat u r tryna say or wat u r tokn abt...
cheers! :)


hehe...yh..i've jst writnn ds..hvnt checkd it out... :lol:
i write many kind of poems,,ds is 1 :P actually writin poems in english iz nt da best fo me :lol:..i prefer in italian :P nyway i've jst writtn ds..afta sum stuff which hapnd 2 me in thes dayz :P:rofl: ds is wht i thnk abt da world..pplz mind..:rofl:
 

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aye_sha90 said:
hehe...yh..i've jst writnn ds..hvnt checkd it out... :lol:
i write many kind of poems,,ds is 1 :P actually writin poems in english iz nt da best fo me :lol:..i prefer in italian :P nyway i've jst writtn ds..afta sum stuff which hapnd 2 me in thes dayz :P:rofl: ds is wht i thnk abt da world..pplz mind..:rofl:


yaa yaa kewl scene....no tnks ..not italian plz...this one is lyk greek too for mee....:baffled: :P
so wtz da implicit meaning of ur wrd RAIN?