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ektharaa widyakin balapuwaama, api kawruth jeevath wenne dawal heena dakimin neda kiyala mata hithenawaa..gambada nisansala parisaraya haa bandunu sarala, awyaaja diwipewetha manasin mawaaganeemath ektharaa widiyaka aashwaadayak..
Bohoma rasawath nirmaanayak sahodaraya..Idiriyedi thawath mewani rasawath kawi sithuwili obata pahala wewaa kiyaa pathanawaa..
 

Mindada hee sara..

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    මහරගම
    ගතින් යුහුසුඵ නාගරික ජීවන රටාවට හිරවු විඩාබර අප මනස අස්වැසිල්ක් ලද සැනින්, නිස්කලන්ක ස්වාභාවික ගම්බද පරිසරය සොයා යනවා නේද?

    අර්ථාන්විත සරල නිර්මාණයක්!

    ඔව් යසි.. මේ නොනවතින තරගයෙන් මිදෙන්නේ කොයි වෙලාවෙද කියලා තමයි අපි කවුරුත් බලාගෙන ඉන්නෙ..

    අදහසට ස්තූතියි.. !
     

    Mindada hee sara..

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    ektharaa widyakin balapuwaama, api kawruth jeevath wenne dawal heena dakimin neda kiyala mata hithenawaa..gambada nisansala parisaraya haa bandunu sarala, awyaaja diwipewetha manasin mawaaganeemath ektharaa widiyaka aashwaadayak..
    Bohoma rasawath nirmaanayak sahodaraya..Idiriyedi thawath mewani rasawath kawi sithuwili obata pahala wewaa kiyaa pathanawaa..

    ඔව් අක්කේ.. ගමේ තියෙන නිර්ව්‍යාජ බව කියන්නේ මොකක්ද කියලවත් අපි ජීවත් වෙන නාගරික සමාජය අදුරන්නේ නැහැ..

    අදහසට ස්තූතියි අක්කේ...
     

    amila_90210

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    මෙන්න මගේ මිත්‍රයා..
    අමිල නැමැති සුන්දර හදවතක් තියෙන මිතුරා නොහිටින්නට මේ නිර්මාණය මේ තරම් හිතට දැනෙන අයුරින් ඉදිරිපත් කරන්න නොහැකි වෙන්න තිබුනා.. උඹට පින් !

    මම එළකිරි එක දාලා යන්නේ නැහැ. මම එළකිරි එකට ණයගැතියි..

    ඕන වෙලාවක ..:D

     

    twisted

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    how come i didn't see this sooner..first of all this is something different ive seen in ek poetry scene..you build up imagery in our minds like nobody else, including myself did before..while reading first and second verses i almost concluded that this poem is about how city is spreading over villages as well but what the hell did i know hehe..the last verse took quite a turn and ended up smoothly not letting the twist oversurpise the reader..to say, ive never liked this writing style but this is clearly an exception... i totally loved how you mixed realism and surrealism which was in most of the poem at the end of the first verse..just awesome that part is man

    if i have anything to complain about this poem that would be multiple meanings you tried to present..it better should alone have been about machine-ish urban life which is hardly alive and concious as apposed to relaxing more human out of city life..may be others liked the political corruption theme that is a major mistake in society but for me ..it just ruined it for me for me this poem would have been better without elections and political frauds.

    and to end, the simplicity, yet the images and symbols you had used are far supior to complicated words that could have been used ..you just conveyed your message to the fullest.
    congrats for the poem it's truly a piece of work. keep going.
     

    Mindada hee sara..

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    how come i didn't see this sooner..first of all this is something different ive seen in ek poetry scene..you build up imagery in our minds like nobody else, including myself did before..while reading first and second verses i almost concluded that this poem is about how city is spreading over villages as well but what the hell did i know hehe..the last verse took quite a turn and ended up smoothly not letting the twist oversurpise the reader..to say, ive never liked this writing style but this is clearly an exception... i totally loved how you mixed realism and surrealism which was in most of the poem at the end of the first verse..just awesome that part is man

    if i have anything to complain about this poem that would be multiple meanings you tried to present..it better should alone have been about machine-ish urban life which is hardly alive and concious as apposed to relaxing more human out of city life..may be others liked the political corruption theme that is a major mistake in society but for me ..it just ruined it for me for me this poem would have been better without elections and political frauds.

    and to end, the simplicity, yet the images and symbols you had used are far supior to complicated words that could have been used ..you just conveyed your message to the fullest.
    congrats for the poem it's truly a piece of work. keep going.

    first let me thank you for your long and detailed comment...

    The politics, thing is this awantha.. i really wanted to turn on my voice against idlers in EK who does nothing but only praising their so called "Hero". Some of them don't even have the right to vote yet. Something i got to know by a thread i posted earlier. But i don't know whether they picked it or not...

    thanks for your encouraging words..
     
    ළා බොළඳ අදහස් වෙනුවට පරිසරය-ගම-ජීවිතය-යතාර්ථය බලාපොරොත්තු යනාදී අනේක සීමා මායිම් ඔස්සේ විහිද ගිය දෙබිඩි (විවිධ කෝණ වලින් වෙනස් වෙනස් අරුත් දෙන)කාව්‍යයක්! ඉතා අගෙයි.දිගටම ලියන්න.සුබ පැතුම්.:)
     

    Mindada hee sara..

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    ළා බොළඳ අදහස් වෙනුවට පරිසරය-ගම-ජීවිතය-යතාර්ථය බලාපොරොත්තු යනාදී අනේක සීමා මායිම් ඔස්සේ විහිද ගිය දෙබිඩි (විවිධ කෝණ වලින් වෙනස් වෙනස් අරුත් දෙන)කාව්‍යයක්! ඉතා අගෙයි.දිගටම ලියන්න.සුබ පැතුම්.:)

    බොහෝම ස්තූතියි ශම්මි අක්කේ.. ඔයාගේ අදහස දැනගන්න මම ආශාවෙන් හිටියේ..