පුතුට එතෙරින් කවියක් (Puthuta Etharin Kawiyak)

[dulhari]

lassanai but i guess it could use a little shaping up

u can propose how can i improve it

 

[twisted]

u can propose how can i improve it

actually it's pretty good last time reading it i spotted a line which didn't go with the rythm and now it does lol i read this two times loud

 

[dulhari]

actually it's pretty good last time reading it i spotted a line which didn't go with the rythm and now it does lol i read this two times loud

Thanks